“Romance Reports”
Characters: Twilight Sparkle, Pinkie Pie, Applejack, Rainbow Dash, Rarity, Fluttershy, Princess Celestia, Princess Luna, Spike, Big Macintosh, Cheerilee, and other background ponies
Twilight Sparkle has a crush on Luna, but the Princess insists that Twilight learn some things about love and romance before they make a date. Starts slow, gets more cloppy as it goes.
Chan thread for discussion:
http://fim.413chan.net/fic/res/13530.html
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Comments
Aponymous | 12 Sep 15:00 | No. 213
this isnt a clop-fic ,this is a proper story with adult elements, not just made to clop but give you a story and a reason.
Aponymous | 15 Sep 04:40 | No. 268
Absolutely sublime from start to finish.
There are bits where the author shows his newness to the writing scene, or at least i assume theyre new, with bits in present tense and awkward description. And every chapter with Luna is pretty hard to read.
But once it gets onto genuine interaction between the mane 6 that all melts away. I have never ever seen characterization this good in dialogue for MLP before. Its just perfect. It reads like an inexplicable M-Rated episode.
This isnt a clopfic. This is a long, well thought out characterization and drama fiction which revolves around Twilights discovery of sex and the complete fuckery it can bring to your life, emotions and friendships.
5 star rating, absolutely bloody fantastic and i hope the author knows it. Easily rated as among the best MLP fics ive read and certainly the best M-Rated one. I salute you.
There are bits where the author shows his newness to the writing scene, or at least i assume theyre new, with bits in present tense and awkward description. And every chapter with Luna is pretty hard to read.
But once it gets onto genuine interaction between the mane 6 that all melts away. I have never ever seen characterization this good in dialogue for MLP before. Its just perfect. It reads like an inexplicable M-Rated episode.
This isnt a clopfic. This is a long, well thought out characterization and drama fiction which revolves around Twilights discovery of sex and the complete fuckery it can bring to your life, emotions and friendships.
5 star rating, absolutely bloody fantastic and i hope the author knows it. Easily rated as among the best MLP fics ive read and certainly the best M-Rated one. I salute you.
Aponymous | 20 Sep 07:42 | No. 362
Somepony reads American Psycho. Don't think I don't notice the Horsia's reference.
Aponymous | 20 Sep 16:21 | No. 368
We really have to stop this stupid-ass story.
Enough is enough, man.
Enough is enough, man.
MeGusta | 20 Sep 20:06 | No. 370
why should the rules apply for all but one clopfic here?
im talking about the if you dont like it dont read it rule.
Some of us dont read stuff just for the sake of ponies fucking each other, some want a story and not just "o hai thar, lets fuck"
anywayz, wonder if the author reads here,probably not but theres hope :(
Hope some time there will be Twilight-Celestia
im talking about the if you dont like it dont read it rule.
Some of us dont read stuff just for the sake of ponies fucking each other, some want a story and not just "o hai thar, lets fuck"
anywayz, wonder if the author reads here,probably not but theres hope :(
Hope some time there will be Twilight-Celestia
Lurkerlisk | 21 Sep 01:43 | No. 385
I'm really loving the story so far, and I hope you continue to work on it. It's far surpassed most of the other clopfictions on this site (No offense to you other authors), but I like it. It stays in character, and seems very natural. A lot of clopfictions just paste the name on, and your not really reading the characters, you're just reading random ponies with stolen names. The pairing with Twilight? Is great, I never thought of it before, and it makes a lot of sense. As said before? It's natural.
DPV111 | 21 Sep 21:41 | No. 414
This is a simply amazing story. I consider this Transcendent Clopfiction (Definition: A clopfic that has such strength of story that it would be of equal worth to read if all explicit content was removed).
Takino | 25 Sep 05:29 | No. 478
I started to read this because I was looking for a good clopfic. And I found one.
Holy
Fucking
God!
THIS right here is why I love this fandom, this community. This is a clopfic, it's a story about cartoon ponies fucking... and it's easily one of the most touching, most moving things I've ever read.
Seriously, after finishing this, it made me want to go hug all my friends and tell them how much they mean to me.
Holy
Fucking
God!
THIS right here is why I love this fandom, this community. This is a clopfic, it's a story about cartoon ponies fucking... and it's easily one of the most touching, most moving things I've ever read.
Seriously, after finishing this, it made me want to go hug all my friends and tell them how much they mean to me.
DTSSpaz | 28 Sep 04:12 | No. 536
Holy. Shit. That was by FAR one ofthebest fanfics I have ever read. I'm not really into clopfics much, but this was just... Fan-fucking-tactic. I completely agree with Takino. One of the most touching, emotional things I have ever read. How high can I rate this? 5 stars? If so, this is definatley a 7-star story. Great job, man.
MeGusta | 04 Oct 19:18 | No. 701
>>696
STOP WRITING THIS SAME COMMENT
IT'S FUCKING STUPID
lol anyways
"The wild Twilight Sparkle closes in for the kill…"
epic line lol
STOP WRITING THIS SAME COMMENT
IT'S FUCKING STUPID
lol anyways
"The wild Twilight Sparkle closes in for the kill…"
epic line lol
Zaar | 05 Oct 22:24 | No. 722
Please, continue wriring this, and disregard all of the hateful comments. You are an awesome writer and this is my favorite M- Rated fic, and my second favorite fanfic. The story is going through an awesome way and i'm looking forward to the ending.
Keep up the awesome work!
Keep up the awesome work!
Aponymous | 07 Oct 02:53 | No. 736
i spent about two hours reading this. i am tired as hell from a red eye flight and i COULD NOT STOP READING. incredible command of character. Your Twilight Sparkle's inner monologue is wonderful, and reminds me a bit of some of the BTVF Willow fics I've read :)
Amazed at how much truth you've put into this story. So much I related to in every chapter. Realy incredible.
Amazed at how much truth you've put into this story. So much I related to in every chapter. Realy incredible.
Tast | 07 Oct 04:51 | No. 740
I occasionally read clopfics. I occasionally find a really good fic. By the rule of probability, its pretty rare for a good clopfic to appear... Yet appear it has. Pretty damn good. This is the romance episode that will never be made. Character interaction is really good, minus Princess Luna, but you only have guesswork to go on there. All in all, 6 star.
MaxVeers | 07 Oct 06:17 | No. 745
This story is now available in PDF format:
http://maximillianveers.deviantart.com/#/d4c189s
http://maximillianveers.deviantart.com/#/d4c189s
DTSSpaz | 08 Oct 04:13 | No. 771
I know that I already commented after chapter 13, but after reading 14 I felt that I need to express my feelings towers this fix once more.
I love this so much. This is now my second favorite fanfiction ever, and by far my favorite +18 one. Absolutely spectacular work, I hope you choose to continue with this story... If there is anywhere else to go with it.
I love this so much. This is now my second favorite fanfiction ever, and by far my favorite +18 one. Absolutely spectacular work, I hope you choose to continue with this story... If there is anywhere else to go with it.
DPV111 | 09 Oct 02:52 | No. 806
@785
Noy ALL, surely?
Some of RagingSemi's less psychotic stuff and Buttersc0tchSundae's story based stuff makes the grade too.
Noy ALL, surely?
Some of RagingSemi's less psychotic stuff and Buttersc0tchSundae's story based stuff makes the grade too.
BronyQuest | 10 Oct 01:15 | No. 821
This is by far my favourite clopfic, because... it simply surpasses its designation as a 'clopfic'. It's drawn emotions from me that other clopfics haven't, AND it's all about the best pony!
mm12 | 11 Oct 10:45 | No. 856
A realistic vision of love in all it's supposed splendor, and the crashing weight of reality to reign it back in. This was a beautiful chapter, and it really shows how people (or pony's, in this case) sabotage themselves by trying to find that unattainable, perfect... cupcake, and ignoring the perfectly good one they have in front of them. . You are an amazing author and convey emotion like very few fic writers I have come across - let alone "clop" fics. Keep up the amazing work, can't wait to see the next chapter!
Misharra | 11 Oct 13:54 | No. 858
I used to come to the directory here to see what diamonds could be found in the rough. But this...this kinda has become my reason for returning on a daily basis. To see if Romance Reports has been updated. The other gems are a very nice seasoning of sprinkles, true, but...this right here -is- the Perfect Cupcake.
And now I have made myself hungry for junk food.
And now I have made myself hungry for junk food.
BronyQuest | 12 Oct 22:15 | No. 896
Ah, the conclusion to the story. I'm both sad to know that there won't be any more chapters, but I'm pleased with how it ended. I simply love this story. It's drawn more emotions from me than just arousal, which even non-clopfics have a hard time doing. Bravo to the author.
Fantaray | 13 Oct 02:19 | No. 899
Allright, I'm not gonna lie. I was sweating motherfucking buckets on that last chapter as I read it. You sir, have earned all the freaking internets.
Too bad the series is over though. If you do decide to write more in another series, I hope you will keep it within the same universe as your current series. Thanks!
Too bad the series is over though. If you do decide to write more in another series, I hope you will keep it within the same universe as your current series. Thanks!
Theangelofjudgement | 13 Oct 05:31 | No. 910
That was amazing I'm sad its over, but happy with how it turned out.
Also thank for the squirting part that is so fucking hot.
Also thank for the squirting part that is so fucking hot.
mm12 | 13 Oct 08:19 | No. 912
Great story, i really enjoyed the finish. Spike's "Not again" reaction was hilarious, and so was Luna's "Are you her most faithful student?" dig. She really comes off like Loki - a trickster God(dess), and really kind of a bitch. That said, i loved her Xanatos/ Lex Luthor gambit - even if she lost, she won. Oh Luna, you precocious bitch, I still love ya.
mm12 | 13 Oct 08:21 | No. 913
Forgot to mention, would like to know how precisely Applejack solved BM's promiscuity, and if that was even true. A sequel, or new story, perhaps?
IS | 13 Oct 10:30 | No. 921
*obligatory praise*
That was good. Very good. Make a sequel, or screw that, just keep writing in general.
That was good. Very good. Make a sequel, or screw that, just keep writing in general.
Tast | 13 Oct 11:26 | No. 922
"Are you her most faithful student?"
Oh god, I lost it.
This was an awesome story... Assuming you're through with it. There could be an epilogue titled "Afterglow". Amazing nonetheless.
Oh god, I lost it.
This was an awesome story... Assuming you're through with it. There could be an epilogue titled "Afterglow". Amazing nonetheless.
Zaar | 14 Oct 13:16 | No. 943
Great job! That was an AWESOME story! Too bad it's already over.
The ending was well crafted, champion.
I'm really hoping to see more of your stories around here. Take care!
The ending was well crafted, champion.
I'm really hoping to see more of your stories around here. Take care!
Aponymous | 14 Oct 13:45 | No. 944
Best clopfic ever.
Because I could see myself in Twilight's horseshoes. I know the exact feelings you described. The want of more, the hurry into love, the anxiety, the fade, everything. And it helped me better understand love. Good Sir, you write true experience into this. I bow to you.
Because I could see myself in Twilight's horseshoes. I know the exact feelings you described. The want of more, the hurry into love, the anxiety, the fade, everything. And it helped me better understand love. Good Sir, you write true experience into this. I bow to you.
Aponymous | 14 Oct 18:08 | No. 952
You've done something incredible and written not just good erotica but a good story. I think the only thing I can say against it is that I'm sorry it's not going on for longer. Thanks for writing this, and I hope you continue to produce such powerful works in the future.
mm12 | 14 Oct 20:18 | No. 955
Beautiful way to end the story, really wraps it up - although now i want to see the rest of the "crew" get their stories flushed out. Looking forward to your future endeavors!
Aponymous | 15 Oct 04:55 | No. 964
One of the best fics i've read in a long while. If it had no lemon parts it would probably be up there as a 6 star on ED.
Aponymous | 15 Oct 05:29 | No. 965
I can't say enough good about this series, I really really hope it continues.
one question though, and this may sound odd...what was Cheerilee's shampoo smell? You set it up and then forgot about it. I wanna know!
one question though, and this may sound odd...what was Cheerilee's shampoo smell? You set it up and then forgot about it. I wanna know!
DPV111 | 15 Oct 06:29 | No. 966
>>965
Sunflowers. It was there in the Ch 16 love scene. It was a semi-joke, and possibly a reference to Samurai Champloo.
Sunflowers. It was there in the Ch 16 love scene. It was a semi-joke, and possibly a reference to Samurai Champloo.
Solarn | 15 Oct 09:32 | No. 967
Honestly, I can see where you were going with this, but Luna just soured the whole thing for me. She was a huge bitch and not only does nopony call her on it, but she's actually supposed to have been right? No, thanks. I'm not that stupid.
ThePonyOne | 15 Oct 17:25 | No. 970
A really great fic overall, but I have 3 major complaints with this fic.
1: I hated how Luna was portrayed as a complete c**t in this fic. I was hoping that somepony would stick it to her and give her the comeuppance she deserved. It was painful to see her like this. I also want to know what happened to her after the report was sent.
2: Why the hay the sudden Applejack X Rarity shipping at the end? I don't normally have an issue with this shipping, but this was WAY out of left field. I also thought that Applejack didn't swing that way earlier in the fic. What happened there? Also there was never any real interaction or hinting to this shipping at all. This was just like, "Where did this come from?" I'd like some sort of explanation please.
3: How did Spike react to his love going with Applejack? There's no explanation or closure at all. Maybe something like he be sad, but one of the CMC (like Sweetie Belle) come and comfort him and he moves on.
Overall a great fic, but needs some plot holes filled in here and there. I'm giving this fic here a B, nice job, but needs some rough spots taken care of.
1: I hated how Luna was portrayed as a complete c**t in this fic. I was hoping that somepony would stick it to her and give her the comeuppance she deserved. It was painful to see her like this. I also want to know what happened to her after the report was sent.
2: Why the hay the sudden Applejack X Rarity shipping at the end? I don't normally have an issue with this shipping, but this was WAY out of left field. I also thought that Applejack didn't swing that way earlier in the fic. What happened there? Also there was never any real interaction or hinting to this shipping at all. This was just like, "Where did this come from?" I'd like some sort of explanation please.
3: How did Spike react to his love going with Applejack? There's no explanation or closure at all. Maybe something like he be sad, but one of the CMC (like Sweetie Belle) come and comfort him and he moves on.
Overall a great fic, but needs some plot holes filled in here and there. I'm giving this fic here a B, nice job, but needs some rough spots taken care of.
DPV111 | 15 Oct 22:10 | No. 972
Luna wasn't a cunt just cause Twi couldn't deal with her feelings. Se may have been selfish and insensitive but she is thousands of ears old. She doesn't coddle her students like Celestia does.
That was not sipping. They are just friends. AJ is 100% straight in this fic.
The author focuses on adult relationships in this fic, not puppy love.
That was not sipping. They are just friends. AJ is 100% straight in this fic.
The author focuses on adult relationships in this fic, not puppy love.
Aponymous | 17 Oct 01:24 | No. 1010
Whew. Guess I'll be the lone dissenting opinion here and say that I thought the story was only average. Seemed unnecessarily lengthy and the relationships / humor didn't draw me in, but I guess I can see how others could like it. I definitely will give the next thing this author posts a shot since he's got potential.
Aponymous | 20 Oct 06:23 | No. 1096
As a clopfic meh there are some good parts in the middle but too much content not um clopy. As a story it is awesome, simply superb if you cleaned this up to just a shipping fic, this would definately 6-star on EqD
Aponymous | 20 Oct 06:29 | No. 1097
IT'S ALRIGHT THEPONYONE YOU'RE ALLOWED TO USE CURSE WORDS IN FRONT OF US
WE'RE ON A SITE DEDICATED TO FAN-WRITTEN STORIES OF MY LITTLE PONY PORNOGRAPHY, IT'S NOT LIKE WE HAVE APPEARANCES TO KEEP UP
WE'RE ON A SITE DEDICATED TO FAN-WRITTEN STORIES OF MY LITTLE PONY PORNOGRAPHY, IT'S NOT LIKE WE HAVE APPEARANCES TO KEEP UP
FanficFanatic | 29 Oct 04:04 | No. 1236
@No. 1097 Lol, agreed
@SleeplessBrony Dude, you have made it to where i cant read any other fanfic including twilight, because i mentally picture what happens in this series. On a scale of 1-10, 10 being best, you get a 12 ( because its 20% cooler than all other fanfics :D ). I did not want to "put this down", in a sense, all of my freetime was devoted to reading the next chapter. I have to admit that the ending was a bit abrupt for my taste, but I enjoyed it throughly. As a clopfiction, i couldnt clop to this, i had too much respect for it. Thats how well of a job you did here. You have all of my highest regards,
F.F.
@SleeplessBrony Dude, you have made it to where i cant read any other fanfic including twilight, because i mentally picture what happens in this series. On a scale of 1-10, 10 being best, you get a 12 ( because its 20% cooler than all other fanfics :D ). I did not want to "put this down", in a sense, all of my freetime was devoted to reading the next chapter. I have to admit that the ending was a bit abrupt for my taste, but I enjoyed it throughly. As a clopfiction, i couldnt clop to this, i had too much respect for it. Thats how well of a job you did here. You have all of my highest regards,
F.F.
MDC | 03 Nov 21:45 | No. 1337
No other piece is worth the elusive "1337" post than this. Very well done, there's nothing I can say that hasn't been said. I hope to see more on the others.
Aponymous | 11 Nov 03:51 | No. 1541
I don't like PinkieDash.
I liked the new chapter.
That's how good a writer you are.
*salutes*
I liked the new chapter.
That's how good a writer you are.
*salutes*
mm12 | 11 Nov 10:39 | No. 1550
Well, maybe Dash will realize Pinkie is her OTO - unless Gilda decides to turn it into the most awkward/awesome threesome ever. That said, i agree the flow would have been wrong had you included that bonus chapter in the original part, although it would account for Twi's dig at their relationship in the later chapter. It also would either have needed additional development throughout the story, or its own side story. Even now I want a sequel to your story to start working on this "universe" you've created. I enjoyed the history lesson about Cherilee and BM (which isn't on this site for some reason), and am looking forward to your future literary endeavors.
DPV111 | 12 Nov 19:10 | No. 1602
Bonus Chapter. Wow. When I think "bonus" I usually think free sprinkles. This was like an extra 2 scoops of ice cream. I'm actually glad that AJ is straight in this universe since otherwise Pinkie wouldn't have gotten a chance with RD.
Anonymous | 12 Nov 23:51 | No. 1604
This is an incredible clopfic. The writing is fantastic, the characters feel real, and you actually care about the plot. The only things I didn't like (besides personal shipping preferences) was that Spike and Fluttershy didn't get nearly enough time in, how much the mane 6 was at ends with each other for a decent part of the fic, and the portrayal of Luna. I love Luna, but not like this. That aside, it really is a fantastic story. Thanks!
FanficFanatic | 17 Nov 02:43 | No. 1691
It's me again. Just read Chapter 18. Not to imply too much, but *pomf*, ~clop clop clop~ I love the Romance Reports. Keep up the good work!
F.F.
F.F.
Takino | 18 Nov 00:30 | No. 1706
I honestly found it rather hard to clop along with that bonus chapter... because I couldn't stop giggling and laughing through the whole thing. You've captured the characters so absolutely perfectly. Bravo.
Aponymous | 18 Nov 04:35 | No. 1721
Are you kidding me? Seriously?
............
Really?
This....is like...one of the best fics I have ever read in a multitude of fandoms and it's a freakin' CLOPFIC...WHAT THE FUCK.
This seriously has a more engaging story then 80% of the regular fics I have red for MLP:FIM...AND IT EVEN HAS CLOPPINESS IN IT FOR AN ADDED BONUS, which completely makes my brain explode. Twice.
I read the last two main chapters (non bonus) like 4 times each. It's that good IMO.
Please keep writing fics for the love of fuck.
............
Really?
This....is like...one of the best fics I have ever read in a multitude of fandoms and it's a freakin' CLOPFIC...WHAT THE FUCK.
This seriously has a more engaging story then 80% of the regular fics I have red for MLP:FIM...AND IT EVEN HAS CLOPPINESS IN IT FOR AN ADDED BONUS, which completely makes my brain explode. Twice.
I read the last two main chapters (non bonus) like 4 times each. It's that good IMO.
Please keep writing fics for the love of fuck.
Aponymous | 07 Dec 00:34 | No. 2170
I can't tell if I'm overly happy for having read that or driven to near-tears for realizing there's no more to read.
Minor prose issues aside, this was an incredible read. When your mind is able to "hear" the dialogue as if it was spoken in the same voice, you know you're reading something that fits. And it certainly does fit - especially with Rainbow Dash, the pony I had the least bit of trouble seeing in character. The characterization was solid; the only bit I really take issue with is Twilight making the "turn" that quickly. 0-60 in ten seconds flat.
And don't even get me started on the clopping. This was a solid story without it - indeed, I'd submit a version without the gratuitous descriptions for more "general" reading - and it only added to the enjoyment. Hell, I found myself not even aroused so much as engaged with the story. Moments where I laughed (mostly because I could see it happening with the characters involved), moments I cried great manly tears of manliness (big fucking crocodile sissy tears), moments I really felt like clopping. Just. Damn.
Luna... I came to resent Luna, and Twilight for having to deal with it. Called the "lesson" fairly early, but seeing how it was implemented (well done, I might add) made the lack of shock palatable.
I thought I remembered reading a post on here that said "I just wish there was a way to show this to my friends without letting them know I clop to ponies" but I can't find it. Regardless of where that post is, I must agree. Again, suggesting a "tamer" version for more generalized reading.
I can't really say more. I'm quite sad that there will be no more to it (saving the epilogue for later; don't want to ruin it with NO more reading at all). Quite sad indeed. And again, the writing was there ever if the nuances of writing wasn't. I enjoyed the story more than my grammar nazi in me hated it. That's a good sign.
6/5, no doubt.
Minor prose issues aside, this was an incredible read. When your mind is able to "hear" the dialogue as if it was spoken in the same voice, you know you're reading something that fits. And it certainly does fit - especially with Rainbow Dash, the pony I had the least bit of trouble seeing in character. The characterization was solid; the only bit I really take issue with is Twilight making the "turn" that quickly. 0-60 in ten seconds flat.
And don't even get me started on the clopping. This was a solid story without it - indeed, I'd submit a version without the gratuitous descriptions for more "general" reading - and it only added to the enjoyment. Hell, I found myself not even aroused so much as engaged with the story. Moments where I laughed (mostly because I could see it happening with the characters involved), moments I cried great manly tears of manliness (big fucking crocodile sissy tears), moments I really felt like clopping. Just. Damn.
Luna... I came to resent Luna, and Twilight for having to deal with it. Called the "lesson" fairly early, but seeing how it was implemented (well done, I might add) made the lack of shock palatable.
I thought I remembered reading a post on here that said "I just wish there was a way to show this to my friends without letting them know I clop to ponies" but I can't find it. Regardless of where that post is, I must agree. Again, suggesting a "tamer" version for more generalized reading.
I can't really say more. I'm quite sad that there will be no more to it (saving the epilogue for later; don't want to ruin it with NO more reading at all). Quite sad indeed. And again, the writing was there ever if the nuances of writing wasn't. I enjoyed the story more than my grammar nazi in me hated it. That's a good sign.
6/5, no doubt.
Jaboc | 07 Dec 00:51 | No. 2176
I can't tell if I'm overly happy for having read that or driven to near-tears for realizing there's no more to read.
Minor prose issues aside, this was an incredible read. When your mind is able to "hear" the dialogue as if it was spoken in the same voice, you know you're reading something that fits. And it certainly does fit - especially with Rainbow Dash, the pony I had the least bit of trouble seeing in character. The characterization was solid; the only bit I really take issue with is Twilight making the "turn" that quickly. 0-60 in ten seconds flat.
And don't even get me started on the clopping. This was a solid story without it - indeed, I'd submit a version without the gratuitous descriptions for more "general" reading - and it only added to the enjoyment. Hell, I found myself not even aroused so much as engaged with the story. Moments where I laughed (mostly because I could see it happening with the characters involved), moments I cried great manly tears of manliness (big fucking crocodile sissy tears), moments I really felt like clopping. Just. Damn.
Luna... I came to resent Luna, and Twilight for having to deal with it. Called the "lesson" fairly early, but seeing how it was implemented (well done, I might add) made the lack of shock palatable.
I thought I remembered reading a post on here that said "I just wish there was a way to show this to my friends without letting them know I clop to ponies" but I can't find it. Regardless of where that post is, I must agree. Again, suggesting a "tamer" version for more generalized reading.
SPOILER TIME
Cherilee was a nice touch. The fact it wasn't an OC insert won right away, but the dynamic between her and Twilight went well (teacher x lifelong student, natch). Was reaaaally rooting for RD when that possibility came up (even though it was pretty obvious from the start what was going to happen) but when it doesn't I was still fairly pleased at the way it was explained.
Couple of plot "holes" (or at least threads left hanging)... though that might just be a hint that you're going to expand the universe in a different story, something I approve of greatly. Anyway, the main thread I'm bugged about was Big Mac. No real ending in two regards, concerning him: Fluttershy, and the backstory. Some smaller things here and there but none so big that I can remember.
I can't really say more. I'm quite sad that there will be no more to it (saving the epilogue for later; don't want to ruin it with NO more reading at all). Quite sad indeed. BUT the fact you've written "Like Aged Wine" makes me happy for all the right reasons - it means you're interested in continuing the continuity. And again, the writing was there ever if the nuances of writing wasn't. I enjoyed the story more than my grammar nazi in me hated it. That's a good sign.
Actually, there is one more thing I can say. This clopfic actually taught me something. Or, at least, it reminded me. Or made it clear to me. Something along those lines. Anyway, the last few chapters really meant a lot to me, seeing as the way you wrote Twilight mimicks a lot of my issues. Maybe it's similar temperment, maybe it's internet mentality. Who knows. Regardless, it was handled well and memorably. And I'm still sad that it's over.
6/5, no doubt.
EDIT: Dammit, I hit post too earliy, it said it was broken, so I took it out and started adding shit. Now I'm triple posting. Blah. I'll add a name this time.
Minor prose issues aside, this was an incredible read. When your mind is able to "hear" the dialogue as if it was spoken in the same voice, you know you're reading something that fits. And it certainly does fit - especially with Rainbow Dash, the pony I had the least bit of trouble seeing in character. The characterization was solid; the only bit I really take issue with is Twilight making the "turn" that quickly. 0-60 in ten seconds flat.
And don't even get me started on the clopping. This was a solid story without it - indeed, I'd submit a version without the gratuitous descriptions for more "general" reading - and it only added to the enjoyment. Hell, I found myself not even aroused so much as engaged with the story. Moments where I laughed (mostly because I could see it happening with the characters involved), moments I cried great manly tears of manliness (big fucking crocodile sissy tears), moments I really felt like clopping. Just. Damn.
Luna... I came to resent Luna, and Twilight for having to deal with it. Called the "lesson" fairly early, but seeing how it was implemented (well done, I might add) made the lack of shock palatable.
I thought I remembered reading a post on here that said "I just wish there was a way to show this to my friends without letting them know I clop to ponies" but I can't find it. Regardless of where that post is, I must agree. Again, suggesting a "tamer" version for more generalized reading.
SPOILER TIME
Cherilee was a nice touch. The fact it wasn't an OC insert won right away, but the dynamic between her and Twilight went well (teacher x lifelong student, natch). Was reaaaally rooting for RD when that possibility came up (even though it was pretty obvious from the start what was going to happen) but when it doesn't I was still fairly pleased at the way it was explained.
Couple of plot "holes" (or at least threads left hanging)... though that might just be a hint that you're going to expand the universe in a different story, something I approve of greatly. Anyway, the main thread I'm bugged about was Big Mac. No real ending in two regards, concerning him: Fluttershy, and the backstory. Some smaller things here and there but none so big that I can remember.
I can't really say more. I'm quite sad that there will be no more to it (saving the epilogue for later; don't want to ruin it with NO more reading at all). Quite sad indeed. BUT the fact you've written "Like Aged Wine" makes me happy for all the right reasons - it means you're interested in continuing the continuity. And again, the writing was there ever if the nuances of writing wasn't. I enjoyed the story more than my grammar nazi in me hated it. That's a good sign.
Actually, there is one more thing I can say. This clopfic actually taught me something. Or, at least, it reminded me. Or made it clear to me. Something along those lines. Anyway, the last few chapters really meant a lot to me, seeing as the way you wrote Twilight mimicks a lot of my issues. Maybe it's similar temperment, maybe it's internet mentality. Who knows. Regardless, it was handled well and memorably. And I'm still sad that it's over.
6/5, no doubt.
EDIT: Dammit, I hit post too earliy, it said it was broken, so I took it out and started adding shit. Now I'm triple posting. Blah. I'll add a name this time.
Rainbowdashyy | 08 Jan 03:27 | No. 3308
I cant get enough of this. Now that im done this series, I feel lost inside. The author should write more, like, after the fact, with Twilight's new life with her perfect mate. 5 stars.
BlackHoo4 | 25 Jan 21:35 | No. 4086
Finished this beautiful story some time ago and I have to say, this has got to be the most well-written piece of literature known to men. I usually dont read My little pony fanfictions and reading a clopfiction would have never crossed my mind before this. Unfortunately there are only few good fics but this has got to be the best.
I know I am not alone when I say that I wish to read more from this author. Cloppy or not doesnt matter.
I know I am not alone when I say that I wish to read more from this author. Cloppy or not doesnt matter.
HibariXanxus | 04 Apr 05:09 | No. 5956
Ok first off I'm going to start that I spent about 2 hours trying to find where I could comment on this story. Second I freaking loved this story, no you have no idea how much I enjoyed reading this fanfic, the times I laughed my Ass off at the humor; the times I would rock back and forth in my chair at the parts when things got bad; the multiple nights I spent reading it; the times I would sit and read the story while waiting for online game lobbies to end the que for me to play. Overall it was an amazing story, you sir, (and even if it is not the original author I'm still saying this to the author) are an amazing writer. I even cried a little at the heart warming parts and at the emotional sad parts. I am so glad I decided to read this story and I thank you for writing it. I will definatly look at the rest of your work just for the storyline and even if it's just adult material, I will read it because of the amazing quality. Again I say I loved this story
Aponymous | 17 Apr 00:26 | No. 6475
Really? Celestia? Really? Why not go all out and make a Trixie ending while your add it. This fanfic is like what PikaSemeChu did to Pokemon. It has only one thing going for it, but everything else just bites the big one. I guess people like OOC-tastic stories.
Okay, from what I can gather, Twilight has a crush on Luna (how? Twilight never meet her at all as of the writing of this fanfic. What's the justification? There's not even a good back story for that), but before they can date each other, Luna want's Twilight to learn about Romance, since she's had numerous lovers (the only few times we see Luna in the show she seems quite and reclusive. I don't see how you got "sexual dynamo" from that, but whatever.) So, basically, Luna set up Twi to whore herself out to become a better lover. How does that makes sense? How does a princess conduct herself like that? And it's pretty obvious that the plan is going to fail horribly, since Twilight is basically playing around with other ponies feelings and emotions. I can't believe how dumb you made Twilight in this (I know that sometimes she's a bit clueless at times, but even this is a massive stretch). If Luna really wanted Twi to learn, why not just teach Twi herself? Oh, right, this is a clop, it doesn't have to make sense. As long as your readers can get off on this, it's okay, right? The only way anyone can enjoy this is that the blood from their brain is somewhere else.
I felt like Applejack (which you effectively killed in "Cherri Trees.") in this story, just looking at these ponies and saying "Who are these things and where are my friends?" Everypony is pretty much a slut simply for the sake of this half-assed plot, which is not how you tell a story. I know what you're thinking, "But this is just a clop, stop thinking about it so much." And you're right, it is just a clop. That's the problem. You think that this is some master piece of story telling, but it's not. The fact that you had to make this into a clop tells me you know you had no real skills in writing, so you write smut, knowing that the masses will just eat it up, regardless of the actual quality. If "Tails of Spike's Harem" can get positive reviews, than so can anybody, including you.
Most clop writers know their stories are shit, or they take stupid request and do the best job they can, but you actually think that this would hold up with the canon of the show, but you failed to realize just how bad your characterization really is. You got the character archetypes right (a little bit, anyway) but not the actual character. It's like you made them stupid and sluttish just for the sake of clop. That's bad.
Your clop scenes got boring, too, so I don't know what the appeal of this is suppose to be. Maybe it's because I don't clop that none of this makes sense.
The only way this would work is that this fanfic was labeled as an Alternate Universe. Or it turns out Discord is the writer. The other way was to make this cute. You know, have Twilight and Luna share a moment with some late night constellations or something, flash forward several months, and Twilight realizes her crush, only to figure out that she knows nothing of Romance, and her date with Luna is coming up. And instead of her doing the "romancing," she would interview or hear stories from other ponies about they're encounter of romance, and we would flash back to their perspective. Later, on their dates, Twilight, being the adorkable pony that she is, messes up the dates by trying to hard, and gives her report about it to Celestia or something.
I don't know, this "every pony is a whore" thing just doesn't work, especially considering they're the elements of harmony, and are suppose to represent said element (not to the point of saturation, of course).
I also noticed that you keep deleting my comets', which tells me that you've probably deleted any comment that you didn't like to give you a better image. You'll even go to a thread and complain about it(that way you'll seem more mature than you actually are), like you did me.
Okay, from what I can gather, Twilight has a crush on Luna (how? Twilight never meet her at all as of the writing of this fanfic. What's the justification? There's not even a good back story for that), but before they can date each other, Luna want's Twilight to learn about Romance, since she's had numerous lovers (the only few times we see Luna in the show she seems quite and reclusive. I don't see how you got "sexual dynamo" from that, but whatever.) So, basically, Luna set up Twi to whore herself out to become a better lover. How does that makes sense? How does a princess conduct herself like that? And it's pretty obvious that the plan is going to fail horribly, since Twilight is basically playing around with other ponies feelings and emotions. I can't believe how dumb you made Twilight in this (I know that sometimes she's a bit clueless at times, but even this is a massive stretch). If Luna really wanted Twi to learn, why not just teach Twi herself? Oh, right, this is a clop, it doesn't have to make sense. As long as your readers can get off on this, it's okay, right? The only way anyone can enjoy this is that the blood from their brain is somewhere else.
I felt like Applejack (which you effectively killed in "Cherri Trees.") in this story, just looking at these ponies and saying "Who are these things and where are my friends?" Everypony is pretty much a slut simply for the sake of this half-assed plot, which is not how you tell a story. I know what you're thinking, "But this is just a clop, stop thinking about it so much." And you're right, it is just a clop. That's the problem. You think that this is some master piece of story telling, but it's not. The fact that you had to make this into a clop tells me you know you had no real skills in writing, so you write smut, knowing that the masses will just eat it up, regardless of the actual quality. If "Tails of Spike's Harem" can get positive reviews, than so can anybody, including you.
Most clop writers know their stories are shit, or they take stupid request and do the best job they can, but you actually think that this would hold up with the canon of the show, but you failed to realize just how bad your characterization really is. You got the character archetypes right (a little bit, anyway) but not the actual character. It's like you made them stupid and sluttish just for the sake of clop. That's bad.
Your clop scenes got boring, too, so I don't know what the appeal of this is suppose to be. Maybe it's because I don't clop that none of this makes sense.
The only way this would work is that this fanfic was labeled as an Alternate Universe. Or it turns out Discord is the writer. The other way was to make this cute. You know, have Twilight and Luna share a moment with some late night constellations or something, flash forward several months, and Twilight realizes her crush, only to figure out that she knows nothing of Romance, and her date with Luna is coming up. And instead of her doing the "romancing," she would interview or hear stories from other ponies about they're encounter of romance, and we would flash back to their perspective. Later, on their dates, Twilight, being the adorkable pony that she is, messes up the dates by trying to hard, and gives her report about it to Celestia or something.
I don't know, this "every pony is a whore" thing just doesn't work, especially considering they're the elements of harmony, and are suppose to represent said element (not to the point of saturation, of course).
I also noticed that you keep deleting my comets', which tells me that you've probably deleted any comment that you didn't like to give you a better image. You'll even go to a thread and complain about it(that way you'll seem more mature than you actually are), like you did me.
Aponymous | 27 Apr 03:59 | No. 6797
>>6795 Oh, what a clever and witty remark. But, this *is* the internet. I'd have an easier time getting a holy paladin to level 69 while you and your dad performed it on each other than getting someone to leave anything insightful. If you really need to give anyone advice, teach your father how to work your balls without biting. Or better yet, choke on each other so you can at least bring some joy to some bored commenter.
By the way, I'm not the guy you're replying too. Just FYI.
By the way, I'm not the guy you're replying too. Just FYI.
Jd | 27 Apr 06:35 | No. 6802
Magnificent.
Great story, amazing style - Loved the almost Dickensian combination of subtle nuances, brilliant characterizations and delightful amounts of effective irony. I really, REALLY just can't say enough about the writing style.
The flow was uneven at places, and some loose ends aren't really tied up satisfactorily (Braeburn being the biggest one), but a very, very good read nonetheless. The core of the story could've been more polished, but the excellent execution more than made up for it.
9.4/10.
(I'm not sure how I feel about the last couple addendums, though. They felt pretty unnecessary. Just sayin'.)
Great story, amazing style - Loved the almost Dickensian combination of subtle nuances, brilliant characterizations and delightful amounts of effective irony. I really, REALLY just can't say enough about the writing style.
The flow was uneven at places, and some loose ends aren't really tied up satisfactorily (Braeburn being the biggest one), but a very, very good read nonetheless. The core of the story could've been more polished, but the excellent execution more than made up for it.
9.4/10.
(I'm not sure how I feel about the last couple addendums, though. They felt pretty unnecessary. Just sayin'.)
Jd | 27 Apr 06:42 | No. 6803
Also, don't take >>6475 too seriously. Many of his criticisms are correct to some degree, but he seems to be forgetting creative license - if you want your horses sluttier than usual for the effective telling of the tale, so be it.
(But yeah...they were pretty slutty, for lack of a better term. Consider moving out of the clopfiction realm, you look like you'll have much better luck.)
(But yeah...they were pretty slutty, for lack of a better term. Consider moving out of the clopfiction realm, you look like you'll have much better luck.)
Aponymous | 28 Apr 04:49 | No. 6819
>>6795 And since in you're sub conscious you've realized you have lost, you fall back to using shitty, out dated internet memes to defend you're self.
Aponymous | 28 Apr 04:50 | No. 6820
All of you people who think this is nicely written, here's a suggestion; read real fiction books.
Voice | 29 Apr 05:27 | No. 6831
Such vitriol from the recent comments! Methinks many of you are being overly critical simply for the sake of being overly critical.
And to the most recent commenter, I'm pretty sure most real fiction books don't depict cartoon horses fucking each other, the very thing that attracts people to this site!
And to the most recent commenter, I'm pretty sure most real fiction books don't depict cartoon horses fucking each other, the very thing that attracts people to this site!
Aponymous | 05 May 00:08 | No. 6968
Easy way to see if a fic is good.
If NaturalGlitch trolls it, it most likely is. He doesn't have any talent himself, so he tries to tear it down.
If NaturalGlitch trolls it, it most likely is. He doesn't have any talent himself, so he tries to tear it down.
Aponymous | 05 May 18:28 | No. 6993
>>6968 Yeah, that makes sense. No, wait, it doesn't.
And if you don't like this story, you're wrong, I guess. Who dares to have a different opinion?
Are you that butt hurt fag from that stupid Twi x Shinning fic? Get better standards, fool.
And if you don't like this story, you're wrong, I guess. Who dares to have a different opinion?
Are you that butt hurt fag from that stupid Twi x Shinning fic? Get better standards, fool.
NEIL_Favor | 05 May 18:31 | No. 6994
>>6968 How dare a reviewer give a review? Especially one that hasn't been refuted? Well, it has, but only with "WAAHH! This is great because SHUT UP!" And look up what trolling actually is, dumb ass.
Aponymous | 07 May 09:41 | No. 7064
>>6993
Nope, fool.
And Glitch doesn't give reviews, he vomits on his keys, wipes once and types whatever is left. What's there to refute? It consists of nothing but "I didn't really read this, but you are horrible and should die!" Yeppers, great reviewing skills right there! Idiots.
Nope, fool.
And Glitch doesn't give reviews, he vomits on his keys, wipes once and types whatever is left. What's there to refute? It consists of nothing but "I didn't really read this, but you are horrible and should die!" Yeppers, great reviewing skills right there! Idiots.
Aponymous | 07 May 15:50 | No. 7067
>>7064 Oh, is that way Sleepless was crying in the comment section, and Glitch tore him a new asshole, only to have Sleepless delete all those comments? Yeah, such a great author. These characters are so OOC they might as well be BG characters wearing the skin of the mane 6.
And that comment you read was a reposing, since Sleepless deleted all the ones that followed that one originally. Like Glitch said: "If you have to break the characters to make way for your shitty plot, then you failed as a writer." He nailed this idiocy on the head, and no one can come up with a real reason why they think it's good. I think it's because clop is the shittiest style of writing, anyone can do it, and no matter how bad it is, because it's a clop, people will eat that shit.
Yeah, don't really care if a clopfic is about true love or about raunchy sex. A fic that exists just to get 2 characters in bed is pretentious and might as well cut to the hot and sticky chase.
I'm just tired of sex being only for clopfiction and not a legitimate story element like violence, drama, etc.
It's like sadfics. Ther is no effing genre called "sad". The legitimate genre is "drama". Yet sadness is not the entirity of drama, nor is it restricted to drama alone. In many comedies, action movies, adventures, etc there are sad moments. It's just an element of storytelling and character development. Yet this fandom treats it like a genre onto itself.
I like sad in my fics, but I don't want fics ABOUT sad. I like romance in my fics, but I don't want fics ABOUT romance to be the only source of it. I like sex and violence and adorable cuteness too. But these are all story elements, not the genres this fandom treats them as.
There are so few balanced and diversified stories. No matter how good the quality of writing in the fandom gets, it still lacks the sense of real world comprehensiveness that good genre writing has.
The other stigma is the term "shipping" being incorrectly used interchangably with "romance". This makes people think of ridiculous fandom internet tropes. Mane 6 shipping, no matter how cute, and putting aside hate from homophobes and canon purists, is ooc and silly as fuck. Whereas a well crafted story involving tru romance actually makes sense rather than being a contrived affair with several "what ifs" as prerequsites for the premise to exist in the first place. The lack of originality in pairings due to the fandom stigma against OCs (not undeserved in many cases) frequently prevents proper romantic themes from developing in normal stories, and the clop stigma prevents these themes from developing into healthy and erotic depictions of normal sexual relationships, despite the fact that these depictions are a common occurence in mainstream fiction of all genres.
In the end I'd take clop over glue any day, but clop still depresses me when I read it. Probably because I care so much more about the characters than the stories they find themselves in.
And that comment you read was a reposing, since Sleepless deleted all the ones that followed that one originally. Like Glitch said: "If you have to break the characters to make way for your shitty plot, then you failed as a writer." He nailed this idiocy on the head, and no one can come up with a real reason why they think it's good. I think it's because clop is the shittiest style of writing, anyone can do it, and no matter how bad it is, because it's a clop, people will eat that shit.
Yeah, don't really care if a clopfic is about true love or about raunchy sex. A fic that exists just to get 2 characters in bed is pretentious and might as well cut to the hot and sticky chase.
I'm just tired of sex being only for clopfiction and not a legitimate story element like violence, drama, etc.
It's like sadfics. Ther is no effing genre called "sad". The legitimate genre is "drama". Yet sadness is not the entirity of drama, nor is it restricted to drama alone. In many comedies, action movies, adventures, etc there are sad moments. It's just an element of storytelling and character development. Yet this fandom treats it like a genre onto itself.
I like sad in my fics, but I don't want fics ABOUT sad. I like romance in my fics, but I don't want fics ABOUT romance to be the only source of it. I like sex and violence and adorable cuteness too. But these are all story elements, not the genres this fandom treats them as.
There are so few balanced and diversified stories. No matter how good the quality of writing in the fandom gets, it still lacks the sense of real world comprehensiveness that good genre writing has.
The other stigma is the term "shipping" being incorrectly used interchangably with "romance". This makes people think of ridiculous fandom internet tropes. Mane 6 shipping, no matter how cute, and putting aside hate from homophobes and canon purists, is ooc and silly as fuck. Whereas a well crafted story involving tru romance actually makes sense rather than being a contrived affair with several "what ifs" as prerequsites for the premise to exist in the first place. The lack of originality in pairings due to the fandom stigma against OCs (not undeserved in many cases) frequently prevents proper romantic themes from developing in normal stories, and the clop stigma prevents these themes from developing into healthy and erotic depictions of normal sexual relationships, despite the fact that these depictions are a common occurence in mainstream fiction of all genres.
In the end I'd take clop over glue any day, but clop still depresses me when I read it. Probably because I care so much more about the characters than the stories they find themselves in.
Aponymous | 09 May 04:39 | No. 7113
Anybody else find it funny when people complain about characterization in a story written solely for the purpose of describing cartoon horse sex?
C'mon, people, shrink your fucking e-peen and go pretend you're a deep, important literary critic somewhere else.
C'mon, people, shrink your fucking e-peen and go pretend you're a deep, important literary critic somewhere else.
Aponymous | 09 May 16:47 | No. 7126
>>7113 We'll do that when people treat this like a clop, not an actual story. People keep saying that this is porn with plot, like it's a good thing. It's pretentious and idiotic, and the author has the biggest ego imaginable. I don't want to sit through and read boring shit just to get to the boring clop scenes.
When people start treating it like smut and not a new entry in the bible, we'll read it like a clop, because that's all it is.
When people start treating it like smut and not a new entry in the bible, we'll read it like a clop, because that's all it is.
Aponymous | 09 May 18:00 | No. 7128
Couldn't care less what other peoples opinions are on what qualifies as literature - I know what I like, and I know I like this, for the plot and the clop and that's all that matters to me. Five hooves up.
Aponymous | 09 May 19:44 | No. 7133
Why does this piece of shit keep being brought up? Who takes away the chapters, just to put them back up? This fic is years old, and it's written like something that would get rejected by trashy romance novel publishers.
Aponymous | 10 May 04:17 | No. 7147
>>7131 One man's trash is another man's treasure.
>>7133 Because pieces of shit like you keep bring up your butthurt about it. Every time someone deletes the link, someone reposts it and it gets pushed back up to the top and gets seen more, achieving the completely opposite than intended effect.
Also, learn to count, as it's less than a year old and less than a month since last update.
Besides, there's got to be a demand out there for trashy romance novels, or nobody would be writing/printing/buying them.
I should care about your Shakespearean standards in the literature you read why?
>>7133 Because pieces of shit like you keep bring up your butthurt about it. Every time someone deletes the link, someone reposts it and it gets pushed back up to the top and gets seen more, achieving the completely opposite than intended effect.
Also, learn to count, as it's less than a year old and less than a month since last update.
Besides, there's got to be a demand out there for trashy romance novels, or nobody would be writing/printing/buying them.
I should care about your Shakespearean standards in the literature you read why?
Aponymous | 10 May 23:47 | No. 7172
>>7147 Hey, you said that this is just a clop. Why you getting so flustered?
Seriously, this writer is like Tim Buckly of clop.
Seriously, this writer is like Tim Buckly of clop.
Aponymous | 15 May 21:21 | No. 7321
Basically, this is "Debbie does Dallas" in pony form. Look at all these people eating this up, like they know what romance actually is. This fucking plan of Luna's was doomed from the start, and Twilight needs to "learn romance" (fuck a lot of ponies) before Luna even goes on a date with Twilight, so she does. And you guy's call this a masterpiece...
Aponymous | 16 May 13:15 | No. 7332
Am I the only one who thinks the amount of butthurt over this fic is hilarious?
To all of the "reviewers": Nobody actually gives a single fuck what you think. People will read this fic no matter how much you hate it, or how much of a blight upon literature it is, or whatever ridiculous labels you apply to it in your multiple-paragraph tirades. People come here to read smut. Period. I honestly can't imagine more than a minuscule fraction of those readers give two shits whether or not the characters they are reading about would 'realistically' (what a profoundly idiotic term when referring to cartoon talking horses...) have sex with each other. This is not canon. This is not SUPPOSED to be canon. If we wanted canonical characters there are tons of other fics we could read, or we could watch the damn show. If this is the kind of thing that you think is worthy of your obviously superior literary acumen, and you think ANYONE is going to take you seriously, you should probably re-examine your life.
To all of the "reviewers": Nobody actually gives a single fuck what you think. People will read this fic no matter how much you hate it, or how much of a blight upon literature it is, or whatever ridiculous labels you apply to it in your multiple-paragraph tirades. People come here to read smut. Period. I honestly can't imagine more than a minuscule fraction of those readers give two shits whether or not the characters they are reading about would 'realistically' (what a profoundly idiotic term when referring to cartoon talking horses...) have sex with each other. This is not canon. This is not SUPPOSED to be canon. If we wanted canonical characters there are tons of other fics we could read, or we could watch the damn show. If this is the kind of thing that you think is worthy of your obviously superior literary acumen, and you think ANYONE is going to take you seriously, you should probably re-examine your life.
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